Kerfus in a Dungeon Quest

Update: I noticed the author made some changes and fixed some typos in this piece. Some things were missed, like will being used instead of we'll. But overall, it showed noticeable improvement and I hope to see the author's other pieces. Good work. And a deserved 5 stars.
Original: In terms of art, the piece is amazing. As for the writing, I counted and wrote down where I spotted more than 20 significant grammatical mistakes that hindered the final result in just the first 10 pages. I would assume WaifuDekai is not a native English speaker, which is nothing to be ashamed of. The main reason I am leaving my review is to offer my own assistance through written suggestions to fix the grammar mistakes, as I am a native English speaker with in-depth knowledge of written English. If WaifuDekai is interested in me volunteering my assistance in fixing the grammar for this piece, please reach out to me at needbetter@tutamail.com or respond to my review with how I should reach you. Lastly, I will gladly make my rating 5 stars if at least some of these grammar mistakes are addressed, whether with my help or someone else's, it matters not to me. Thank you.